(一)
(1)
几片翠绿的茶叶,静静地躺在紫砂壶底,这时,沸水来了,它们开始轻轻舞动。于是,水变翠绿了,升起的缭绕水雾也变翠绿了。忽然惊醒,原来又是那个美丽的梦。
A few green tea leaves are lying quietly at the bottom of the teapot. At this time, the boiling water comes, and they begin to dance gently. As a result, the water becomes green, and the rising water mist becomes green. Suddenly wake up, the original is that beautiful dream.
这个梦总在我脑海中一遍又一遍地出现,但每次当我正要端起那杯茶时,却又忽然醒来。在梦中,茶的清香,这般的清闲、安逸,与现实显得那么格格不入。白天,我没有时间泡茶,更没有心思品茶;于是,在梦中享受那份闲适与快乐。然而近在咫尺的杯子却怎么也触摸不到,那是因为我的理智不允许我放松一分一秒,即使是在梦中。
This dream always appeared in my mind again and again, but every time I was about to pick up that cup of tea, I suddenly woke up. In the dream, the fragrance of tea, such leisure and ease, is so incompatible with reality. During the day, I have no time to make tea and no mind to taste it, so I enjoy the leisure and happiness in my dream. However, I can't touch the cup close to me because my mind doesn't allow me to relax for a second, even in my dream.
这究竟是因为繁忙的我对清闲如饥似渴,还是因为经历了繁忙的我,懂得了清闲的快乐,我自己并不清楚。我只知道,梦醒后,还有更多的事要做。
Whether it's because busy I'm hungry for leisure, or because I've experienced the busyness and understood the happiness of leisure, I don't know. I only know that there is more to do after waking up.
(二)
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牵着好友的手,漫步在繁星点缀着的天空下。夜,没有让世界沉寂,因为我的确感受到了青春的气息。我们回味着过去,憧憬着未来,心早已飞到了另一个美丽的国度。脚边的小草也久久不肯睡去,它想偷听我们在讲什么,因为它永远感受不到什么叫做苦涩后的甜蜜。只有我们,高考前的我们才会拥有这份感受。自己的命运握在自己的手中,这是再幸福不过的事情了。
Holding a friend's hand, walking in the starry sky. Night, did not let the world quiet, because I did feel the breath of youth. We look back on the past and look forward to the future. Our heart has already flown to another beautiful country. The grass at the foot also refuses to sleep for a long time. It wants to eavesdrop on what we are talking about, because it will never feel what is the sweet after bitterness. Only we, before the college entrance examination, can we have this feeling. My destiny is in my own hands, which is the happiest thing.
(三)
(three)
一阵秋风吹来,枫叶满地,大家一拥而上,希望拾到最红最美的那片枫叶。然而真正有价值的江枫不会轻易被微风吹落,它高高地站在树顶,如火焰般鲜艳夺目。于是,大家争相向上爬。一不留神,被旁边的同学挤了下来,重重地摔在地上,磨破了手,折断了腿,疼痛钻心。但我哪敢休息片刻,只怕晚了一步,枫叶便被摘走。我忍着疼痛向上爬,眼泪,只好悄悄地流进肚里。
A gust of autumn wind blows, maple leaves are all over the ground, everyone rushes up, hoping to find the reddest and most beautiful maple leaf. However, the real valuable Maple will not be easily blown down by the breeze. It stands high on the top of the tree, as bright as fire. So, everyone scrambled up. One inattention, was next to the students squeezed down, fell heavily on the ground, worn out the hand, broke the leg, pain in the heart. But I dare not rest for a moment, even if I am a step late, the maple leaves will be picked. I climbed up in pain, tears, had to quietly flow into my stomach.
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“高考”这道家常菜,说来平常,却风味十足。酸甜苦辣样样俱全。虽然,我确实不肯多尝一次,然而它的味道已经刻骨铭心了。
"College entrance examination" is a common dish, but it's full of flavor. Everything is sweet, sour, bitter and hot. Although I do not want to taste it once more, the taste of it is unforgettable.
当多年后的某一天,高考的味道再次回味在嘴里时,更会百感交集,意味深远。
When one day, many years later, the taste of college entrance examination is in the mouth again, it will be more mixed and far-reaching.
名师点评
Famous teachers' comments
本文值得借鉴的地方还是有不少:如标题就显得很有品味,正文以三个片断,从不同的角度诠释了自己对“高考”的理解和感悟。但存在的问题还是不少:第一片断读完后,我们竟然不知道考生究竟要写什么,要表达什么主旨;第二片断谈自己的命运自己掌握,可是所列举的与之并没有多大关联,而且还有几个错别字出现,让本文大打折扣。最后被判为三类文,不能不令人感到遗憾。
There are many points worth learning from in this paper: for example, the title seems to have a good taste, and the body interprets its own understanding and perception of "college entrance examination" from different perspectives in three pieces. But there are still many problems: after reading the first section, we don't know what the examinee is going to write and express; the second section talks about his own destiny, but the list has little to do with it, and there are still a few wrong words, which makes this article discount. It's a pity that we were finally sentenced to three categories.