2020gre写作的丢分点

GRE作文最重要的还是要把你的观点完整地传达给读者。这是文之根本。今天小编就和大家分享GRE作文扣分点解析,希望能够帮助到大家，来欣赏一下吧。

GRE作文扣分点解析 你要注意了

1。逻辑混乱。

2。过于主观。

3。中式思维/表达。

4。过分注重用词。

大体上来说，同学们的逻辑问题是最多的。逻辑问题有三种，通篇逻辑，段落之间，段落之中。

其实这可能和我们高中初中的英语教育有关系，大家都很喜欢一条一条摆原因。Firstly，secondly。。。然后后面至于这个ly后面是什么就不管了，一顿胡扯。也不管这段落与段落之间的衔接是否自然，反正都有什么ly给打头阵。

事实上，中西方的思维总是存在差异，很多时候看管老师们都不懂考生在说什么。考官很困惑，这个例子和这个有关系吗?为什么前面在说A，后面突然B了? 和结论什么关系?要记住一点，文章是一个整体，你的开篇结尾和中部内容都是应该有关联的。也就是说，在开头提到的，文中应该有展开，同时在结尾有总结。中文里不也要求行文流畅么，这至少得要求逻辑是通顺的。

很多同学都很喜欢写中立观点“A不错，但不够好”，这虽然看起来很客观，但实际上对逻辑的要求非常高，要怎样去组织语言，组织相应的论据论点，非常考验人。有同学想说A事件要瑕疵互见，但是写着写着就乱七八糟，东一块西一块，不知道在讲点什么了。更有厉害的索性冗长的2000来词，讲了个空话。所以建议刚上手的同学，还是选择一边倒，站定脚跟不放松。即便是真的要写中立观点，实际上也都在A和B之间有所偏好。

此外，现在很多人会要求练writing的时候先写提纲。于是同学们们就只写一个观点，然后后面的例子乱用，或者根本没有弄清楚什么是例子。事实上，这种展开，可以是实例，也可以是虚拟的假设。实例中往往分自己的经验和他人的经验。那么怎样的例子有说服力呢?一般来说是：名人名事(知名度大)> 众人众事(样本大)>自己经历(体会深)>他人经历。假设往往不够有说服力，因为很难涉及到每一个变量。但是假设在有的时候可以行得通，就是在很难说清楚步骤和因果关系的时候，用一个假设场景来推导会让文章变得浅显易懂。

所以建议，在刚开始上手写toefl作文的时候，先不要给自己30分钟的压力，先列出提纲(10分钟)，再用30分钟去写，看能写多少。

记住你的举例一定要死死扣住你的观点，不要是和观点打擦边球的。比如我改过之前一个小朋友的文章，她的大观点是电脑对学生来说是有益的，小观点是，可以查到很多资料，然后例子是可以用google查到很多资料，很快捷。ok，乍一看这个没有问题。但是实际上问题大了，用goole查到很多资料，是因为电脑还是internet?这很容易就偏题了，变成internet对学生来说是有益的。例子一定要从论点出发，再回到论点。不要将你的论点发散，后果很可能就是越写越跑题。所以每次写好一篇文章，都看看，论据里的keywords是不是和论点里的keywords一样，论点里的keywords又是不是和题目里的keywords一样。你的keywords可以比大题里的keywords更加narrow，但是千万不要更加广泛。

最后说的逻辑错误，是段落中逻辑比较容易错的。一般是对接续词的运用。如However，thus，therefore，他们决定了上下文之间的关系，但是很多读起来就很奇怪，两者完全不是转折的关系，用了however，就会让人觉得有些无厘头。或者就是上下文之间完全没有逻辑联系，就是两个单句凑在了一起。还是这句话，一篇文章和流水似的，不能断。中间断了那就不叫好文章了。即使前一句与有一句没有接续词，它们在逻辑上也是要能承接的。

以上就是中国学生GRE作文三大逻辑问题失分点介绍，各位考生可以对症下药，进行克服。其实逻辑上的错误很难克服，很多大牛的著作里也经常会被后人挖出逻辑错误。但是我们至少要克服这些一眼就能看出的逻辑错误，才能让文章看起来更加舒适。

GRE作文范文：Success

GRE作文练习题目：Success

Success, whether academic or professional, involves an ability to survive in a new environment and, eventually, to change it.

成功，无论是学术上的还是职业上的，都涉及了适应新环境并最终改变新环境的能力。

GRE作文范文：

Many wonder the intrinsic impact of industrial revolution over the last century. Is it a blessing or a curse? Ever since the invention of steam engine, mass production enabled factories to make out products in a madly efficient manner, while machines also supplanted innumerous traditionally skilled artisan, forcing them out of work. Gone are the days when they boasted of their craftsmanship that they assumed to be able support their family all their life. Consumers became more aspiring to novel design instead of durability as goods were made to be discarded.

Hundreds years later, with the first installation of integrated circuit on the chip, another profound turnover took place. Now the computer pervades our life so much that one may find himself half illiterate in absence of input skill. This time, thousands of jobs were created in Silicon Valley, transforming some of the few into billionaire over one night. Nevertheless, the original inventor might not expect that the ensuing slow down and thus recession in IT sector would approach so soon in less than 10 years, which is obviously less than a presumable 15 years time normal for a periodical change.Positive or negative, one mark that characterizes the technological bombardment indicates a constant fact: changes exist ubiquitously and operating at an ever-increasing tempo; those who fail to catch up with the torrent of change would ineluctably engulfed by billows, floating no where and eventually dissolve as negligible bubbles.

Favors as well as opportunities goes to who adapt to the contemporary trend. Fully recognizing this axiom, long before the scientists announced accomplishment of sketches of human genes or earlier successful cloning of Doris, candidates preparing for university admission have smelt the sense. Today, in the U.S., biology and its branch disciplines become the first choice for top students of senior high, determining that this subject, foretold as the third wave in technology, could bring them brilliant future as “Bill Gates” dreamt the same in the previous wave.

In addition to academic realm, respect would be paid to people who though deprived of their past secure professions, choose not to be a loser in the whimsical society. Like the artisans who lost jobs, a vast number of skilled laborer in China’s city of Wengzhou have undergone darkness and depression in those old days. However, after years of endeavor and refinement, they prove their value again. By accurately posit the economic trend and market demand, they play an active role in almost all economic sectors, garments, catering and lodging, hi-tech industry, you name it.

While ability honed in surviving the fickleness of the world makes the path through success shorter, it is essential for the more ambitious to acquire the pith of reformist and lead the trend. In this way, it could help him distinguish from the mediocracy and platitude. This is absolutely not an easy task. Inborn insight and foresight are needed to tell uncommon out of the commonplace; extraordinary perseverance and encouragement is a must to face the coming challenges against his iconoclasm. Very few people crowned with triumph possess this quality, whether the Nobel Prize winner or those who makes coverage on the Times.

In sum, as shown in the course of history, success, whether academic or professional,involves an ability to surviving in a new environment and---, eventually, ---to change it.Now some elite persons have again forecast that another social change is impending.Are you ready for that?

GRE作文范文：独立思考

What most human beings really want to attain is not knowledge, but certainty. Gaining real knowledge requires taking risks and keeping the mind open―but most people prefer to be reassured rather than to learn the complex and often unsettling truth about anything.

GRE作文范文参考：

What does most human beings want is not discovery and change but reassurance.Although discoveries and changes are the real impetuses of human civilization, most people prefer reassurance than innovations and changes in that in this world most people are conservative and the discoveries and changes would sometimes harm some ones' benefit, which based on the obsolete systems.

On the one hand, in fact, most people value what they have obtained much more than what would be gain through new ways. This conservative kind of thinking in some sense is very common indeed since trying new ways always means taking risks of losing the present benefit. Take many Chinese workers for example. In China now,during the transformation of economy system, many factories and companies are under the danger of bankruptcy due to their rigid ways of thinking. And the workers in these companies or factories do not have positive attitudes neither. They ignore, or we can say give up, the better chance such as leave the old companies and find a new one which would be more suitable or quite for a short time to study some new skills; but stay where they are to wait for reassurance from the companies or government. the reason for this kind of behaviors is that they are fear for losing the jobs, whish however have little points after all. Simply put, they think they can survive if they keep the salary, but maybe lose everything when taking risks. Actually, these people fail to see the wealth behind changes and discoveries. No pain, no gain. One reluctantly loses something, he/she would not gain more important and valuable.

On the other hand, discoveries and changes would bring new systems and value and moral standards, which would necessarily break the outdated ones. In this sense,discoveries and changes could harm some ones or some classes' benefit. Therefore, it is not difficult to understand the resistance against new things and the preference of reassurance to the obsolete system. The Industry Revolution is just a case in point.

The significant change had brought human beings into a new stage of both material and spirit; but during the revolution, many people hold the point of view that the change is very dangerous to human civilization. Such individuals included peasants,old noble men and some government officials. The fundamental reason for this situation was that such a profound and overall change shook the old social and economy system and thus those depended on such a system felt they were threatened.

For example, the peasants lost their lands and the old noble men lost their taxes from the peasants; even the government officials, were in the fear of losing their positions.Thereby, for the men who would still receive benefit from the obsolete system, they would prefer reassurance than changes and discoveries.

It is true that sometimes changes and discoveries would bring some damage to the present society; yet they would automatically build a new one full of vigor and creativity. So people should not be restrained with the conservative ideas and open their minds to see the future benefit they would gain from the new system built by changes and discoveries. Anyway, new things are always prior to the old ones.