微笑，恰如淌过的溪流，柔和恬静；微笑，恰似那悬挂的一刀新月，皎洁光亮；微笑，又恰似那挺拔的苍松，积蓄着万般力量……
Smile, just like the flowing stream, soft and quiet; smile, just like the new moon hanging, bringing light; smile, just like the tall pine, accumulating all kinds of strength
如果说，有一种力量可以让人坚韧不拔，那便是微笑的力量；如果说，有一种力量可以让人自信满满，那便是微笑的力量；如果说，有一种力量可以让人心头一暖，那便是微笑的力量！
If there is a power that can make people persevere, it is the power of smile; if there is a power that can make people confident, it is the power of smile; if there is a power that can make people warm, it is the power of smile!
那次天崩地裂，那次地动山摇，高楼大厦瞬间成为一片瓦砾，多少生命在废墟下呼唤求助。当解放军战士将一个小男孩成功托起，放入单架时，他轻轻地一笑，用满是灰尘的右手向战士们敬礼！这是一个孩子的微笑，也是灾区人民对未来充满希望的一笑。它传达了太多：乐观坚强地活着，感谢所有关心灾区的朋友们，我很好！
That time, the earth broke, that time, high-rise buildings suddenly became a piece of rubble, how many lives called for help under the ruins. When the PLA soldiers successfully lifted a little boy into a single frame, he smiled softly and saluted the soldiers with his dusty right hand! This is a child's smile, but also a smile of hope for the future of the people in the disaster area. It conveys too much: optimistic and strong to live, thank all the friends who care about the disaster area, I am very good!
也许小男孩不曾想到很多，他只知道，每天都是阳光的，而微笑，是给自己最好的犒赏。
Maybe the little boy didn't think of much, he only knew that every day is sunny, and smile is the best reward for himself.
我们喜欢微笑，喜欢嘴角的翘起，喜欢那弯起的弧度，更喜欢它所传达的一种力量。
We like to smile, like the corner of the mouth, like the curved arc, more like the power it conveys.
奥运会的志愿者们，无论在何种场合，面对何种肤色、国籍的人，总是报以微笑。这不仅展现了一个大国的风采，更展现出了中华民族包容的姿态。它在向全世界传递着一种力量，一种海纳百川、拥抱世界的力量！
Olympic volunteers, no matter what occasion, face what color, nationality, always smile. This shows not only the style of a big country, but also the inclusive attitude of the Chinese nation. It is transmitting a kind of power to the whole world, a kind of power that embraces all rivers and embraces the world!
而那2008张源自世界各地的笑脸，同样传达出微笑不可抗拒的力量。
And the 2008 smiling faces from all over the world also convey the irresistible power of smile.
不需要李白“仰天长笑出门去，我辈岂是蓬蒿人”的大笑；不需要“我自横刀向天笑，去留肝胆两昆仑”的充满血腥的狂笑；也不需要“一骑红尘妃子笑，无人知是荔枝来”的红颜一笑……这些笑，或太狂放不羁，或太刚烈顽强，抑或充满妩媚。而我们需要的，不过是浅浅的会心一笑。
There is no need for Li Bai's laughter of "go out with a long smile, my generation is not a Penghao man"; there is no need for me to laugh from the horizontal knife to the sky, to keep the two Kunlun Mountains of liver and gall "; there is no need for a smile of" ride the red lady, no one knows it's litchi " These laughs are either too wild, too strong, or full of charm. What we need is a smile.
人们很容易记住温总理那慈祥的笑容，那是自信满满的他发自肺腑的微笑。面对金融危机，从容不迫，面对外国记者的犀利问题，他依旧笑对。他正如一代儒者，温文尔雅地处世待人。他的微笑，不也是一种力量吗？这是笑对人生的一种力量！
It's easy for people to remember Premier Wen's kind smile. It's a confident smile from his heart. In the face of the financial crisis, leisurely, in the face of the sharp problems of foreign journalists, he still smiled right. Like a generation of Confucians, he is gentle in his life. Isn't his smile also a power? This is a power of laughter to life!
微笑，正如同一支支高擎的火炬，在全世界，在湛蓝的天空下，一直传递着……
Smile, just like the same torch, in the whole world, under the blue sky, has been passing
当人们帮助了困境中的你，你的微笑是感激，是满怀深情的力量；当别人不小心踩到你，你的微笑便是宽容大度的力量；当厄运侵袭了你，而你却报以微笑时，微笑便成了坚强勇敢的力量！
When people help you in a difficult situation, your smile is a grateful and affectionate power; when others step on you carelessly, your smile is a power of tolerance and magnanimity; when misfortune strikes you and you smile back, your smile becomes a strong and brave power!
如果全世界都充满爱，充满微笑，将不再会有伊拉克战争、巴以冲突以及朝核问题。我们，作为新世纪的主人，将肩负着历史赋予我们的责任，那就是将微笑作为一种力量传递到世界的每个角落……
If the whole world is full of love and smile, there will be no more Iraq war, Palestinian Israeli conflict and North Korean nuclear issue. We, as the masters of the new century, will shoulder the responsibility entrusted to us by history, that is, to transmit smile as a power to every corner of the world
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本文写作的着力点（“微笑”）集中，表达“微笑”能够传递一种力量的人生感悟。
This paper focuses on the focus of writing ("smile") to express that "smile" can convey a power of life perception.
文章开头两段用六个排比句简洁有力地点明观点———“微笑也是一种力量”；接着列举了汶川地震中小男孩乐观坚强的微笑、2008年奥运会志愿者拥抱世界的微笑、温总理慈祥从容的微笑，以此来表现微笑的力量，其中又通过对比，突出不同于狂放不羁、刚烈顽强、妩媚动人的“会心一笑”的价值与意义，从而深化了文章的中心。
In the first two paragraphs of the article, six lines of comparison are used to point out the viewpoint succinctly and powerfully - "smile is also a kind of power"; then, the optimistic and strong smile of small and medium-sized boys in Wenchuan earthquake, the smile of 2008 Olympic Games volunteers embracing the world, and the gentle and calm smile of Premier Wen are cited to show the power of smile. In addition, through comparison, they are different from unrestrained, strong and tenacious The value and significance of the charming "knowing and laughing" deepen the center of the article.
全文开合有度，论证有力，语言流畅。
The full text is open and close to a certain extent, with strong argument and fluent language.
