爷爷是个老中医,家中总是堆满了各式各样的草药。我总是喜欢端着小凳在一旁静静地看爷爷磨药,熬药。可当那一缕缕药气逐渐弥漫整个屋内,我却厌恶地远远躲避。
Grandpa is an old Chinese medicine. His family is always full of all kinds of herbs. I always like to take a small stool and watch grandpa grind and cook medicine quietly. But when the wisps of medicine gradually spread throughout the house, I was disgusted to avoid far away.
小时候常在药铺里玩耍。高大结实的柜台,黑褐色的漆面,发黄陈旧的标签,一副小秤,一双巧手在重重的药柜之间穿梭不歇。爷爷时常会像变戏法似的对哭闹的我拿出几枚甘草片,我含在嘴中,一丝淡淡的甘甜萦绕舌间,于是忘记了药铺苦涩的气味,嘴角微扬,畅想着在遥远的山中,是不是也有人温柔地采摘这些草药,然后晾晒,品尝……
I used to play in the drugstore when I was a child. Tall and strong counter, dark brown paint, yellow and old label, a pair of small scales, a pair of skilled hands shuttle between heavy medicine cabinets. Grandpa often magically takes out some licorice slices to me crying. I hold them in my mouth, a touch of sweetness lingers in my tongue, so I forget the bitter smell of the medicine shop. The corners of my mouth are slightly raised, and I wonder if there are people picking these herbs gently in the distant mountains, drying them and tasting them
童年是在一碗碗褐色药汤里度过的。爷爷佝偻的背影,药罐里冒出的气体,还有不断舔舐着罐底的蓝色火苗,都一一定格在时光碎片里。那时爷爷总会端着一个白瓷碗,手里带着两块冰糖,笑眯眯地递送到我面前:“良药苦口利于病,乖囡囡,喝了药身体就好了。”我却时常任性地将药碗打翻,留下爷爷独自躲在屋内哭泣。
Childhood is spent in a bowl of brown medicine soup. Grandpa's hunched back, the gas from the medicine can, and the blue flames licking the bottom of the can are all fixed in the fragments of time. At that time, Grandpa would always carry a white porcelain bowl with two pieces of ice sugar in his hand and pass them to me with a smile: "a good medicine is bitter for the sick, and a good girl will be well after drinking it." But I often wilfully overturn the medicine bowl, leaving grandpa alone in the house to cry.
在病榻上层能靠看书画画来消磨时光。于是从家中破旧的中草药图典里认识了许多美丽的名字:白芷,半夏,紫宛,青黛……爷爷不厌其烦地告诉我它们的功效作用。我常常想,她们前世一定是温婉绰约的美丽女子,然后化作这些草药给病人以最大的安抚。《红楼》里林妹妹让人惋怜的身影,也许只有药香的衬托才楚楚动人吧。夏喝香薷解暑,冬喝冰糖燕窝……氤氲里的潇湘馆才显得如此与众不同。
On the upper floor of the sickbed, you can kill time by reading painting and calligraphy. So I learned many beautiful names from the old Chinese herbal medicine atlas at home: Angelica dahurica, pinellia, Ziwan, indigo Grandpa kept telling me about their efficacy. I often think that they must have been gentle and graceful beautiful women in their previous lives, and then turned into these herbs to give patients the greatest comfort. In the red chamber, sister Lin's pitiful figure may only be touched by the fragrance of medicine. Drink Elsholtzia in summer and bird's nest in winter The Xiaoxiang Pavilion in Yinyun is so different.
还曾和爷爷去乡间采药,一路上的阳光明媚或是细雨霏霏,背着背篓的爷爷专注地捻着一颗草药,细细地嗅着。回来路上,竟看到一家小小的药铺。爷爷熟悉地和他们打着招呼。原来,这样的草药香,己然成为一种独特的旋律,飘散在天涯海角,散落在城市乡间每一个角落,给病人带来最温柔的健康保证。
He once went to the countryside with his grandfather to collect herbs. The sun was shining or the drizzle was falling all the way. Grandpa, who was carrying the basket on his back, was twisting a herb and sniffing it carefully. On the way back, I saw a small drugstore. Grandpa greeted them with familiarity. It turns out that this kind of herbal fragrance has become a unique melody, floating in the ends of the world, scattered in every corner of the city and countryside, bringing the most gentle health guarantee to patients.
爷爷又在熬药了,我不再逃避,“乖囡囡,快让药气熏一熏才好呢!”药香如蝶,满室翩飞,满室氤氲里,是爷爷慈祥的笑容,和我理解的沉思。
Grandpa is cooking medicine again. I will not run away any more. "My dear daughter, let the medicine smoke quickly." The fragrance of medicine is like a butterfly, flying in the room, and dense in the room. It's grandpa's kind smile and my understanding of meditation.
这样苦涩的药香,却成为我心中最香醇的余味与芬芳,伴随着爷爷的爱,细致,绵软,濡染浸透我的人生。这缠绕而挥之不去的药香,是我生命最美好的芬芳!
Such bitter and astringent fragrance of medicine has become the most fragrant aftertaste and fragrance in my heart. With Grandpa's love, it is delicate, soft and permeates my life. This lingering fragrance of medicine is the best fragrance of my life!
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借鉴范文:
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《荔枝蜜》(杨朔)
Litchi honey (Yang Shuo)
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欲扬先抑,从平淡入手逐渐引人入胜,情趣不断。
It is gradually fascinating and interesting to start from the plain.
专家点评
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“守着金山要会用”
"Keep the golden mountain and use it"
优分作文以“生活味”取胜
Excellent composition wins with "life flavor"
今年高考作文优分卷一共8篇,比去年少了4篇,是评分标准高了还是有意减少优卷比例,目前参与高考作文评卷的老师没有透露。优秀作文的共同点,是切中“也”这个题眼,此外,从生活中来是今年优秀卷的明显特征。
There are 8 excellent papers in this year's college entrance examination, 4 less than last year. Whether the scoring standard is higher or whether the proportion of excellent papers is intentionally reduced? At present, the teachers participating in the college entrance examination composition evaluation have not disclosed. The common point of excellent composition is to focus on the topic of "also". In addition, it is the obvious feature of this year's excellent volume from life.
今年的优秀作文,市教科院中学教研室语文科主任俞发亮认为,体现了返璞归真的特点,有些文章借鉴了名家名篇的经典模式。《这也是一种爱》中“望着父亲起身离去的背影,儿子有些茫然”一段,有朱自清《背影》的影子。《这也是一种芬芳》中“爷爷又在熬药了,我不再逃避”,从讨厌到喜欢,有杨朔《荔枝蜜》的味道。
This year's excellent composition, Yu Fuliang, director of the Chinese Department of the middle school teaching and Research Office of the Municipal Academy of Educational Sciences, believes that it embodies the characteristics of returning to the basics and returning to the true. Some articles draw on the classic model of famous writers and articles. "This is also a kind of love" in "looking at the back of the father to leave, the son is a little confused" section, there is the shadow of Zhu Ziqing's "back". "This is also a kind of fragrance" in "Grandpa is cooking medicine again, I will not escape", from hate to like, has the taste of Yangshuo "litchi honey".
“盘活自己的知识积累和生活体验”,俞发亮用知名学者孙绍振的话来评析今年高考优秀作文。他说,高中语文侧重文学教育,其实中学阶段有很多经典作品可以借鉴,“守着金山要会利用”。除了从经典篇章中寻找思路外,今年作文的风格也是一种倾向,华丽的“美文”不再受宠,转向质朴、生活和人生感受。《这也是一种承诺》用时事为题,有作者对生活的感悟和体验;《这也是一种爱》以第三者角度的述事方式,显得与众不同;《这也是一种力量》集中、凝练,容易让读者接受,打破了笑给人愉悦感的“通俗”看法而成为一种力量,是最有力地点到了“也”这个核心。
"Invigorating one's own knowledge accumulation and life experience", Yu uses the words of sun Shaozhen, a well-known scholar, to analyze the excellent compositions of this year's college entrance examination. He said that high school Chinese focuses on literature education. In fact, there are many classic works that can be used for reference in middle school, "we should be able to use them when we are guarding Jinshan". In addition to looking for ideas from classic chapters, the style of this year's composition is also a trend. The gorgeous "beautiful article" is no longer favored, but turns to simplicity, life and life experience. This is also a kind of promise, with current affairs as its title, has the author's perception and experience of life; this is also a kind of love, with a third-party way of describing things, is different; this is also a kind of power, concentrated and concise, easy for readers to accept, breaking the "popular" view of laughter and becoming a power, is the most powerful place to reach the "also" core Heart.