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听!妈妈在低吟;看!妈妈在哭泣。因为妈妈在思念着往日的春光。

Listen! Mother is whispering; look! Mother is crying. Because my mother is missing the past spring.

回忆往昔,妈妈说:看多好。是啊!青山绿水,蓝天白云,炊烟袅袅。流光溢彩的世界如此美妙。可是她转瞬皱起眉头,一片愁云悄然浮现。

Recalling the past, my mother said: how nice to see. Yeah! Green mountains and waters, blue sky and white clouds, smoke curling up. The world is so beautiful. But in a flash she frowned, and a cloud of gloom crept up.

是啊,怎能不愁,怎能不低吟,又怎能不哭泣。工厂竖起来了,汽车跑起来了;矿山踏下去了,树木倒下去了,动物也离我们而去。只剩下孤零零的妈妈整日哀叹。

Yes, how can we not worry, how can we not whisper, and how can we not cry. Factories are up, cars are running; mines are down, trees are down, and animals are leaving us. Only the lonely mother lamented all day.

空气中到处充斥着工厂烟囱里冒出的可怕气体,蔚蓝的天空也黯然失色,再也折射不出阳光美妙的身资。昏黄的世界,妈妈平添了几缕白发。

The air is filled with the terrible gas from the factory chimneys, and the blue sky is also eclipsed, which no longer reflects the beautiful body of sunlight. In the world of dusky yellow, my mother has a few strands of white hair.

池塘里游鱼耐不住剧烈变化的水温纷纷逃离或是横尸江河。褐色的池水让妈妈的明眸再也无法散发光辉。妈妈眼角的皱纹日益清晰。

The fish in the pond can't stand the drastic change of water temperature and flee or cross the river. Brown pool water makes my mother's bright eyes no longer shine. The wrinkles on the corner of mother's eyes are becoming more and more clear.

隆隆的机响充斥在耳边,草丛中、树梢上却听不见往昔欢快的蝉鸣、鸟啼。世界热闹了沸腾了。妈妈却一次次更加沉默了。

The rumble of the machine filled my ears, but I couldn't hear the chirp of cicadas and birds in the grass and the treetops. The world is boisterous. But again and again my mother was more silent.

于是,妈妈,我们几十亿共同的地球妈妈苍老了。她无力再欢笑,甚至再无力看到我们的成长壮大。

So, mom, our billions of common earth moms are old. She couldn't laugh, or even see us grow.

但是我们的地球妈妈从未放弃希望。子孙的劣迹,她看在眼里;孩子付出,她记在心里。我们的妈妈看到你轻轻捡起了地上的纸屑,看到你采取措施对付烟囱里的有毒气体,看到你净化污水后再排进河流。也听到你的大声疾呼:爱护我们的地球妈妈。妈妈笑了。

But our earth mother never gave up hope. She sees the bad deeds of her children; she remembers the children's efforts. Our mother saw you gently pick up the paper scraps on the ground, saw you take measures to deal with the toxic gas in the chimney, saw you purify the sewage and then discharge it into the river. I also heard your voice: love our earth mother. Mom smiled.

妈妈渴盼着长江水患不再发生,伦敦光化烟雾永不再现,北京沙尘暴永远绝迹,妈妈更希望八国峰会上传来喜讯。

My mother is eager that the Yangtze River flood will not happen again, London's photochemical smog will never reappear, Beijing's sandstorm will never disappear, and my mother hopes that the G8 summit will bring good news.

春光是温暖的,清新的,明亮的,清爽的。它必将给妈妈带来欢笑,带来希望。让我们共同看望地球妈妈,带上春光。

Spring is warm, fresh, bright and fresh. It will bring laughter and hope to mom. Let's visit mother earth and bring the spring light.

这春光不仅仅是自然的春光,它还应是一种大爱,是发自内心的对妈妈的爱,是一种必将付诸行动的爱。也更是一种承诺,对地球妈妈的承诺。

This spring light is not only a natural spring light, it should also be a kind of great love, a love from the heart for mom, a love that will be put into action. It is also a commitment to the earth mother.

妈妈,我们亲爱的地球妈妈,您必将在春光中笑靥如花,你必将在世人面前重现往日的繁华。您还会毫不吝啬,继续造福子孙万代。

Mom, our dear Earth mom, you will smile like flowers in the spring light, and you will reproduce the past prosperity in front of the world. You will not be stingy and continue to benefit future generations.

只要我们人人都提上装满爱和承诺的满篮春光去看地球妈妈,我们的地球妈妈必将生机昂然,我们明天就将更加美好。

As long as all of us put up a basket full of love and commitment to see the earth mother, our earth mother will be alive, and we will be better tomorrow.

[简评]本文是安徽高考作文的标杆文,专家评分58分。评分依据如下:

[brief comment] this article is the benchmark text of Anhui college entrance examination composition, with experts scoring 58 points. The scoring basis is as follows:

一.立意新颖。文章作者别出心裁,跳出常人思维的模式,从环保的角度去着笔,并虚化了标题中妈妈为地球妈妈。角度独特,立意新颖。

1、 Original idea. The author of this article is out of his mind, jumping out of the mode of ordinary people's thinking, writing from the perspective of environmental protection, and falsely changing the mother of the earth in the title. The angle is unique and the idea is novel.

二.主题明确。文章紧扣标题的重点词语:春光,妈妈。着力表达了妈妈的大度和奉献以及妈妈的伤心和无奈。也表达了儿子对妈妈的理解和感恩。为让地球妈妈春光无限。让地球母妈妈变得更好,不再受污染遭破坏。儿子们作出自己的努力。主题明了。

2、 The theme is clear. The key words of the title: Chunguang, mom. It focuses on the expression of her generosity and dedication as well as her sadness and helplessness. He also expressed his son's understanding and gratitude to his mother. In order to let the earth mother spring unlimited. Let mother earth become better, no longer be damaged by pollution. The sons made their own efforts. The theme is clear.

三.文采飞扬。文章中对比、排比、对偶等修辞手法的运用,使行文语句流畅,文采斐然。长短句式,错落参差,富有变化。读后满口余香。

3、 Literary talent is flying. The rhetorical devices such as contrast, parallelism and antithesis are used in this paper to make the sentences fluent and elegant. The long and short sentence patterns vary widely. After reading it, I have a good smell.

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