《这就是我》

我的童年是五彩缤纷的，在我的童年里流淌着纯真和甜美，总会使人产生难以忘怀的回忆。

My childhood is colorful, flowing with innocence and sweetness in my childhood, always making people have unforgettable memories.

记得在我5岁的时候，一个春光明媚的星期天，我正在房间里自由自在地玩耍着......忽然，从大厅传来一阵“嗡嗡嗡”的响声，我闻声赶过来，只见爸爸坐 在沙发上，架起二郎腿，手里拿着一件奇形怪状的东西在剃胡子，我睁大眼睛，迷惑不解地问爸爸：“爸爸，这是啥东西？”“噢，你问这个是吧？这是专门帮爸爸 剃胡子的小助手！”话音刚落，爸爸又眉开眼笑地剃着胡子，那样子真让人羡慕。我呆呆地站在那儿，若有所思.......

I remember when I was 5 years old, on a sunny spring Sunday, I was playing freely in my room... Suddenly, there was a "buzzing" noise from the hall, I heard it and rushed to my father's seat On the sofa, I set up my legs, and I was shaving with a strange thing in my hand. I opened my eyes wide and asked my father in bewilderment, "Dad, what is this?" "Oh, you ask that, don't you? This is a little assistant who helps dad shave! " As soon as the voice came down, Dad shaved his beard with a smile on his face, which was really enviable. I stood there in a daze, thinking

第二天早晨，我起床后，无意中发现我家的小白狗的嘴边长着几根长长的胡子，顿时我眼睛一亮：嗨，用爸爸的“超级武器”帮小狗整理一下“发型”。我为自己的 小聪明而手舞足蹈。说干就干，我环顾“四周”，觉得非常安全，我便采取了行动，我蹑手蹑脚来到爸爸房间。哈，不费吹灰之力就找到了那个怪东西，我又蹦又跳 的，甭提有多高兴了！来到院子，我抓起小白狗，不管三七二十一，三下两下就把小白狗的胡子剃得一干二净了。我看着自己的“杰作”非常开心，心想：爸妈回来 后，肯定会好好夸奖我一番的......更多：关于童年趣事的作文

The next morning, when I got up, I found that my little white dog had several long moustaches on his mouth. My eyes lit up: Hey, use dad's "super weapon" to help the dog tidy up his "hair style". I'm dancing for my cleverness. Say do it, I look around and think it's very safe, so I take action, I tiptoe to Dad's room. Ha, I found that strange thing without any effort. I jumped and jumped again and again. How happy I am! When I came to the yard, I picked up the little white dog. No matter what, I shaved his beard completely. Looking at my "masterpiece", I was very happy, thinking: when my parents come back, I will definitely praise me... More: composition about interesting stories of childhood

夜幕降临，妈妈终于下班了，我嬉皮笑脸地向妈妈讲述了今天发生的事，妈妈听后，被我那天真的举动弄得哭笑不得，我真是丈二和尚—摸不着头脑。妈妈语重心长地对我说：“狗的胡子对它有极大的帮助，不能随便乱剪帮助。等你长大后，自己去查资料就会明白。”

When night fell, my mother finally got off work. I told my mother what happened today with a smile on my face. After listening to it, my mother was bewildered by my innocent actions. I was really the second in law monk - I couldn't understand. My mother said to me earnestly, "a dog's beard is of great help to him. You can't cut it casually.". When you grow up, you'll find out by yourself. "

随着岁月的流逝，这已是我心中一个曾让我细细回味的音符了。每当想起这件事，我总会捧腹大笑。这也是我心中布满欢乐的“日记”。

With the passage of time, this has been a note in my heart that I have been savoring. Whenever I think about it, I always laugh. This is also my heart full of joy "diary".

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1.小作者向我们讲述了他童年时曾做过的一件荒唐事—在好奇心的驱使下，用“剃须刀”为小狗理了新发型，本是好意，怎知是违背规律办了错事。故事情节具体生动，结构完整。

1. The little author tells us about a ridiculous thing he did in his childhood. Driven by curiosity, he used a "razor" to get a new hair style for the dog. It was a good idea, but how could he know that he did something wrong against the law. The plot is concrete and vivid with complete structure.

2.文章对人物神态及动作描写生动形象，对话符合人物身份。“我”0的心理活动也刻画的真实准确，将一个天真可爱的孩子形象生动地展现在我们面前。

2. The article describes the characters' expression and action vividly, and the dialogue conforms to the characters' identity. The psychological activities of "I" 0 are also true and accurate, which vividly displays a naive and lovely child in front of us.

3.语言自然流畅，条理清晰，充满生活气息。

3. The language is natural and fluent, clear and full of life atmosphere.