I'm a Chilnese girl. But l have an English girl friend.She is a very good girl,and she has a big family. Tow brot-hers and tow sisters. Tow brothers are John and Jim,tow sisters are Alice and Kate.She is Miya,and she has a mat-her and a father.
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I'm a Chinese girl. And l have an English girl friend who is called Miya. She is a very good girl and she has got a really big family. There are seven people in her family. Her father, mother, two brothers-John and Jim, and two sisters-Alice and Kate.
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